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She leaves me frequently, without warning-
this capricious lover of mine.
Without provocation, she deserts me;
without rhyme or reason she leaves me to
complete her madness in the dark.

I forget often that she is Master
and I mustn't question her actions
even though they leave me at a loss.
As I standby, and learn to dissect myself
like an insect speared on a peg,
or a corpse rotting in some grimy catacomb,
I must recite the mantra:
she is god. She is god.

Fragments of days pass by me
and I, in a haze of half-forgotten memory, cannot piece together
any singular moment in time
that could connect to anything else.
There is only her,
and her spindly hands upon my throat
before she finishes her rounds
and smugly skips away.

I try fruitlessly to pick up the
shattered remains of what was once a human life.
Her face is tattooed on my soul.
Her voice echoes in the lonely halls of my memory.
Her touch is a scar upon my existence.
I cannot salvage a thing.

And then, just like the tide,
she strolls back into my life;
also without warning,
without any trace of sense.
And I collect her in my embrace
and she sighs as if she is bored.

Her distant demeanor is upsetting
for I know she'll soon disappear.
And though I yearn to bind myself to her very flesh
I know that would only kill her.
Unlike me, she always was,
and shall remain,
free.
About the fleeting nature of joy.

"There is no greater sorrow than to recall in misery the time when you were happy."
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Art-of-the-Seraphim Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
Eroticism through ethereal frailty
Seduction through sadistic disposition

and deeply woven story behind the outer skin of this great poem.
thank you for sharing it with us.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading & commenting :) I'm glad you like it, and picked up on the 'darker' themes. I had more than the obvious meaning in mind when I wrote this.
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Art-of-the-Seraphim Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
oh yes I agree. Any form of writing that has another layer to it, like something opaque and subjective leaves the rest of the work in a powerful frame. The unmentioned bulk, if you will.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes and writing that way is difficult sometimes... But it's definitely worth it.
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Art-of-the-Seraphim Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
I couldn't agree more. :D
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TheEponymousImago Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is incredible haha oh my god.

i can relate to the content on so many levels and you've captured it really well.

thank you for writing this (:
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww thank you so much for the praise! :hug:
I am glad you enjoyed it. :)
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TheEponymousImago Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
you're welcome x3
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Codaai Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013
this is awesome!
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :D
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zepIyn Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
We've given you a mention in this months journal at :icongoldmedalart: <3 I agree that it needs more love, as it's a very well thought out and awesome poem C: You can see it here - [link]
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Thank you so much :D
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zepIyn Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're welcome <3.
Keep writing awesome stuff, please.
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wdnest Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
This is a WONDERFUL piece. Congratulations on this.
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wdnest Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Just have to say again that this deserves more recognition as it is great piece and one of the better poems I have read in a while. Thanks for the inspiring piece.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I am honored by your comment. Honestly, what you said means a lot to me. This poem came to me so easily and after it was done I knew that I liked it, but I wasn't sure if anyone else would. I am very glad to see that you and others have enjoyed it.
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wdnest Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
It is amazing when you write something "just right" you know it as you are writing the poem and stunned at the results.

I am going to try and write in this style. It captured my imagination. Thanks - I have featured it in my new group as well
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Digital Artist
The emotion within this poem is strong.
The contrast of this piece sets the mood for the whole poem
for it engages me as the reader to deeply feel the true emotions expressed...
This is very well written...I enjoyed each word :clap:
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your kind words! I am glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate you taking the time to give me some feedback =)
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
most welcome:hug:
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NigmaSin Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Masterpiece.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! =)
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